I NEED A REVISION FOR THIS ASSESSMENT I UPLOAD BELOW, THIS IS GOING TO BE MY LAST ATTEMPT TO SUMMITTED AT SCHOOL, PLEASE IF YOU CAN DO SOMETHING FOR ME.

THIS IS FOR THE CLASS “INTRODUCTION TO HUMANITY”

PLEASE IF YOU CAN HIGHLIGHT ALL CHANGES YOU MADE.

Literature Analysis

DOWN MY TEACHER COMMENTS AND THE CRITERIAS THAT NEED REVISION AND CHANGES.

Overall Comments:

Other than the areas you highlighted I do not see any changes to this paper. I would have hoped that you would have expanded in the areas I identified in the last draft. A rewrite is by nature meant to show significant changes and additions. it is not simply an addition of a few lines here and there. For that reason I cannot give you any marks for anything except the two areas that you identified. The rest, as they have not changed (I still see the same typos and incomplete sentences) must receive a non-performance grade.

Criteria 2: Explain how Shakespeare’s Hamlet externalizes the inner thoughts of Hamlet.

Analyzes how Shakespeare’s <em>Hamlet</em> externalizes the inner thoughts of Hamlet; analysis uses specific quotations and the appropriate literary analysis terminology.

Criteria 4: Express a unique personal narrative in soliloquy form.

Creates a unique personal narrative in soliloquy form; creation draws on techniques used in Shakespeare’s <em>Hamlet</em>.

Criteria 5: Write coherently to support a central idea in appropriate format with correct grammar, usage, and mechanics.

Writes coherently, using evidence to support a central idea in a consistent format with correct grammar, usage, and mechanics.

COMMENTS:

As there are minimal changes to your paper with no attempt to correct sentence structure or spelling (For example you wrote “Hamlet makes Horatio and Marcellus swear that they will not give speak of what they have seen or heard.” will not give speak is incorrect.) I see no improvement of your performance for this criteria.